But sentence #1 up above is better because it shows a higher level of grammar - a more complex sentence.
However, you can't write all your sentences with relative clauses. Remember, the criteria for IELTS is GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY. So make sure you have a variety of sentences - but do include relative clauses to increase your score.
To get a higher score in IELTS writing your ideas must connect - not only in your brain, but also on the paper!
Let me show you an example with a cause and effect paragraph.
WITHOUT GOOD COHESION
Universities around the world are changing the way they assess student work. Now, students submit work to an online program to be checked for plagiarism. The lecturers do not have to spend so much time checking for dishonest use of sources.
WITH GOOD COHESION
Universities around the world are changing the way they assess student work. Now, the students have to submit their work to an online program where it is checked for plagiarism. The lecturers, therefore, do not have to spend so much of their time checking for dishonest use of original sources.
Can you see how the second text is better than the first - THIS one will get a higher score in IELTS for cohesion.
Arrgghh...! You're in the middle of the test, you're reading the Task 2 topic and you don't know whether it's an opinion essay, a problem-solution essay, a discussion essay? HELP!
4Can you see the difference between these 4 topics?
These are the 4 most common essay topics in IELTS Task 2 Academic Writing.
Then, this analysis should help you PLAN your main body paragraphs.
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